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This was a jouney to the past for me and many other readers, I expect. I could really relate to all the imagination of a little kid in here. I really like the end where you tell that you are older now and that you no longer do those things, but it has shaped who you are and that will stay with you forever. The lines and stanzas were very well organized and had a good flow/rythm. You don't really see a lot of poems on this subject(most of them are a bit confusing), but yours made a whole world come together. The only thing is that your diction in certain areas could be added/improved onto(still was good though). Overall I really enjoyed this poem and the subjects of it.
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